04 - Bring the Pain - Revision history

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Kkay at 20:39, 7 October 2018

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Kkay: /* Chapter Twenty-Four */

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‎Chapter Twenty-Four

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‎Chapter Eighteen

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‎Chapter Ten

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‎Chapter Ten

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‎Chapter Seven

John.Raisor at 04:37, 6 August 2018

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 ====Chapter Four====
 Brownstone drove Alison back to school. Their weekend of family fun had taken its toll, leaving the girl exhausted and napping on their way back. I think I’m almost as tired as when I was escaping all those hitmen. James wondered why he had become a bounty hunter, and why Alison had wanted to see him in  action. Did she want to do the same? James looked at her, sleeping, and thought, You don’t have to make the same mistakes I did, kid. You can be better than me. And I want to make sure you will be.
-Back at school, as Alison was getting out of the car, James saw all of the boys start to run indirections away from them. Alison said they were scared, because she had told the Brownstone was her father, and that he was overprotective. And “What boy wants to risk making the Scourge of the Harriken mad?”
+Back at school, as Alison was getting out of the car, James saw all of the boys start to run in different directions away from them. Alison said they were scared, because she had told the Brownstone was her father, and that he was overprotective. And “What boy wants to risk making the Scourge of the Harriken mad?”
 When James get back to LA, Mack asks a favor of him. Would he take down a level one, Xander Stevens. He has info related to a case where a cop was killed. We got people looking for him, but you got all sorts of channels we don’t. Just your name makes shit happen, and we need this guy.” Sure, James would do it for Mack.
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 ====Chapter Six====
 Grandfather meets with five assassins in Tokyo. $2 million dead, $5 million if alive. In euros, not $US. “I wish to have some...entertainment with Mr. Brownstone before he dies. I have access to excellent doctors who can do a good job keeping him alive while I make him suffer. I will provide you with as much information as I have on the man. Use it however you want. I don’t care how you do it. I don’t care about collateral damage or innocent people dying. I only care that James Brownstone is either killed or brought to me.”
-James, Shay and Alison out to lunch, in Virginia. The Rolling Hills Barbecue Pit Stop. Shay had brought sound disruptors, so no one cold hear them talking. Alison thought BBQ a good idea, because Drow  were supposed to be big meat eaters Protein needed? Wanted to talk about their futures, but wanted to eat first.
+James, Shay and Alison out to lunch, in Virginia. The Rolling Hills Barbecue Pit Stop. Shay had brought sound disrupters, so no one cold hear them talking. Alison thought BBQ a good idea, because Drow  were supposed to be big meat eaters Protein needed? Wanted to talk about their futures, but wanted to eat first.
 Told Alison her legacy was a wish, from her Mom, which must be freely given “Yep, a wish. An actual honest-to-goodness wish. That was what the Harriken wanted. That was why they kidnapped her and planned to kidnap you—to force her to give them the wish. But it must be freely given. “Your mom did give the wish freely to someone, just not the Harriken.” Alison tilted her head, confused for a few seconds, then gasped. “You have it, James?” “Yeah. She gave it to me to hold onto. Told me to give it to you when the time was right.” Shay cleared her throat. “Gave it to him by kissing him, by the way.”
 “I’m about to fly halfway around the world to take on some bad guys on their turf and in their home country. I need to give it to you before I leave because if the worst happens your inheritance shouldn’t die with me.” “My mom kissed you?” “Sure. Their lips were locked like she was the Titanic and he was the iceberg,” Shay said.
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 '''THE AMULET NECKLACE'''
-Brownstone decides to find out what his necklace can really do, what its cost to him might be, so asks Shay to research it for him. Shay took pictures of it with a regular lens, and with a UV filter. Showed glyphs with a UV filter, which Shay could research in her Warehouse Four Library. Asked him about the language he had spoken when he was found. Mostly pops and clicks. Xhosa?(Africa) Remember anything about the jungle? Colors? Plants? Animals? Amulet?  It makes me tougher, improves my telekinesis, and...it hurts like fucking hell when I put it on. Does it make you stronger or faster otherwise? Still didn’t tell her about the voice whispering to him when he wore it. Shay went to her Warehouse Library, to look up the glyphs, which she had seen somewhere before. Found her reference in Ancient Pyramids of Latin America. Not Oriceran, maybe involving another planet.
+Brownstone decides to find out what his necklace can really do, what its cost to him might be, so asks Shay to research it for him. Shay took pictures of it with a regular lens, and with a UV filter. Showed gliphs with a UV filter, which Shay could research in her Warehouse Four Library. Asked him about the language he had spoken when he was found. Mostly pops and clicks. Xhosa?(Africa) Remember anything about the jungle? Colors? Plants? Animals? Amulet?  It makes me tougher, improves my telekinesis, and...it hurts like fucking hell when I put it on. Does it make you stronger or faster otherwise? Still didn’t tell her about the voice whispering to him when he wore it. Shay went to her Warehouse Library, to look up the gliphs, which she had seen somewhere before. Found her reference in Ancient Pyramids of Latin America. Not Oriceran, maybe involving another planet.
 Brownstone went to Black Sun, found it had been upgraded tremendously – paint, TV, tables and chairs, refinished bar. “This is the bar that betting for and against Brownstone built.” Brownstone wanted info on Xander Stevens. Tyler gave him a phone# to start his search.
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 ====Chapter Eleven====
 Brownstone, wanting to insure a future for Shay and Alison in the event of his death by the assassins, goes to Tyler at the Black Sun Bar and makes a deal to set up a new betting pool on the action with the assassins. Good deal for all concerned (See Groups, Assassin Betting Pool)
-Shay goes to Professor Armstrong, an academic archaeologist, to help her solve the mystery of the glyphs. He recommends going to an Oriceran Scholar. Perhaps they know something we Earth people don’t know.
+Shay goes to Professor Armstrong, an academic archaeologist, to help her solve the mystery of the gliphs. He recommends going to an Oriceran Scholar. Perhaps they know something we Earth people don’t know.
 Brownstone goes to house construction, talks with Trey. When house done, gong to have a big housewarming party!
 Trey likes that.
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 ====Chapter Fifteen====
-Brownstone meets Peyton. Peyton and Shay talk about Brownstone, and Shay’s relationships with him. Peyton thnks he’s not gay, just clueless, and that Shay will have to make all of the moves. Brownstone comes back from looking around the warehouse, and wants to start packing for Japan.
+Brownstone meets Peyton. Peyton and Shay talk about Brownstone, and Shay’s relationships with him. Peyton thinks he’s not gay, just clueless, and that Shay will have to make all of the moves. Brownstone comes back from looking around the warehouse, and wants to start packing for Japan.
 ====Chapter Sixteen====
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 ====Chapter Nineteen====
-While Brownstone goes into the police station to receive his bounty money, Shay keeps watch outside, on street. Notices four Japanese women, old, young, police woman, young in pant suit, all in ankle-length black boots, looking at station. Guesses it’s Hisa, warns Blackstone. Put on your amulet!  Go to subway, five blocks down the street, down, watch for black boots. Keep her busy.
+While Brownstone goes into the police station to receive his bounty money, Shay keeps watch outside, on street. Notices four Japanese women, old, young, police woman, young in pant suit, all in ankle-length black boots, looking at station. Guesses it’s Hisa, warns Brownstone. Put on your amulet!  Go to subway, five blocks down the street, down, watch for black boots. Keep her busy.
 James does so, and, because he’s wearing the amulet, all of Hisa’s moves, plans, poisons cannot ham him. Shay comes up, stabs her in the back, kills her. James removes a small brush from his pocket, using blood paints a glyph on her forehead, and chants a spell. A small black portal opens, starts sucking the body into the Oriceran in between world, just as the professor had said it would. Another one down. Shay goes to the restroom, calls Alison,tells her it’s all OK, just two more and the Harriken to go.
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 ====Chapter Twenty-One====
-Sabine calls Brownstone, asking him to come to a construction site, along with Shay, whom she is aware of. Will take on both of them. Almost feels like a casual encounter, Sabine in jeans, tennis shoes, and cream-colored top, Shay and James in coats. Amulet’s whispers grow louder and more insistent in his mind as if the amulet was worried about something. Sabine didn’thave a gun or any weapon, just her necklace, which she addressed and “asked Grendel to give her strength and make her his revenge claws.” Sabine, James and Shay knock, kick, slam, and punish each other for a long while, Shay concentrating on destroying the necklace with bullets, James on keeping Sabine occupied with bodily activities. Eventually, James thrust a spike through her head as Sahay shot at the neckalace again and again this time exploding it. The spike had gone through Sabine’s head, and she was dead. James again put the body into the in between.
+Sabine calls Brownstone, asking him to come to a construction site, along with Shay, whom she is aware of. Will take on both of them. Almost feels like a casual encounter, Sabine in jeans, tennis shoes, and cream-colored top, Shay and James in coats. Amulet’s whispers grow louder and more insistent in his mind as if the amulet was worried about something. Sabine didn’t have a gun or any weapon, just her necklace, which she addressed and “asked Grendel to give her strength and make her his revenge claws.” Sabine, James and Shay knock, kick, slam, and punish each other for a long while, Shay concentrating on destroying the necklace with bullets, James on keeping Sabine occupied with bodily activities. Eventually, James thrust a spike through her head as Shay shot at the necklace again and again this time exploding it. The spike had gone through Sabine’s head, and she was dead. James again put the body into the in between.
 ====Chapter Twenty-Two====
-As James and Shay prepare to go after the Harriken, Detective Sakamoto informs them that there are some gas repairs in the Azabu area that need immediate attention, and that the police wold be re-routing traffic in that area so that innocent people would not be in danger from the potential “explosions”. James asks, “What if someone was to go to Azabu and, you know, speed up the process of fixing the gas leak. What would you say to that?”  “I think anyone who could do that would find that quiet appreciation sometimes works better than public praise. Now, the local police have to concentrate on keeping civilians away from any potential explosions and they aren’t going to interfere with a public works specialist in the performance of his duty. We would appreciate that, and I’ll also note that it will be easier for people evaluating the damage after the fact if certain people weren’t around to draw attention to themselves.” Shay tells Brownstone his necklace has nothing to do with demons, and that he definitely needs to wear it. She believes he’s not from Earth, not even Oriceran, but from another planet. And his amulet is not so much a weapon as a tool for turning someone into a weapon, I think. A few of those glyphs have something to do with war.” “I’m some sort of living weapon? If what you’re saying is true…fuck, I’m just becoming what I was supposed to be. I don’t know if I like the idea that I’m some sort of weapon.”
+As James and Shay prepare to go after the Harriken, Detective Sakamoto informs them that there are some gas repairs in the Azabu area that need immediate attention, and that the police wold be re-routing traffic in that area so that innocent people would not be in danger from the potential “explosions”. James asks, “What if someone was to go to Azabu and, you know, speed up the process of fixing the gas leak. What would you say to that?”  “I think anyone who could do that would find that quiet appreciation sometimes works better than public praise. Now, the local police have to concentrate on keeping civilians away from any potential explosions and they aren’t going to interfere with a public works specialist in the performance of his duty. We would appreciate that, and I’ll also note that it will be easier for people evaluating the damage after the fact if certain people weren’t around to draw attention to themselves.” Shay tells Brownstone his necklace has nothing to do with demons, and that he definitely needs to wear it. She believes he’s not from Earth, not even Oriceran, but from another planet. And his amulet is not so much a weapon as a tool for turning someone into a weapon, I think. A few of those gliphs have something to do with war.” “I’m some sort of living weapon? If what you’re saying is true…fuck, I’m just becoming what I was supposed to be. I don’t know if I like the idea that I’m some sort of weapon.”
 “A weapon’s not evil or good, Brownstone. It’s all about who’s holding it.”
 “If I’m the weapon, who is holding me?” Shay shrugged. “For now, I guess maybe me?”

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 The leader of the Harriken stood behind a small table that was low to the ground. He was clad in an elaborately patterned kimono and held a ''tachi''.
 '''“I am Grandfather'''. I lead the Harriken, and I will be the man to take your life, James Brownstone.”
-“That a Masamune?” “Of course, Brownstone,” Grandfather replied with a smirk. “I applaud you for making it his far, but we both know you will fall before this sword.”
+“That a Masamune?” “Of course, Brownstone,” Grandfather replied with a smirk. “I applaud you for making it this far, but we both know you will fall before this sword.”
 As they began to move toward each other, Shay fired, killing Grandfather. . “It was either that or get a ruler out and offer to measure your dicks,” she snorted. “Fuck, Brownstone, were you going to talk him to death?”
 Shay ran to a computer in the corner, inserted a thumb drive and called Peyton to hack into their systems before Brownstone blew it all up.

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 Magic had returned to Earth, and its strong connection to Oriceran only underlined the fact that monsters were real and more than ready to prey upon mankind.
 '''Brownstone''' seeks the “bug” in a local stand of forest.
-He could tell he was getting closer now to his prey. The trees and bushes grew increasingly brown, their leaves withered and dying. Their very life force was being sucked out. . The dying vegetation wasn’t the only change. Since he’d entered the forest he’d heard bugs or animals, but now heard only the quiet moaning of the wind and the crunch of branches under his feet. The one wildcard in the situation was the despair bug’s ability to get into people’s heads. From what he’d read, it only worked on people who already had issues with depression or sadness. The monster talks to James, in the guise of Father Thomas, his orphanage “father”, Thomas tries to convince him to take his own life, but James knows he’s fake, and shoots the vision. The real bug now shows itself, and James manages to knife it in the head and in its eyes, killing it.
+He could tell he was getting closer now to his prey. The trees and bushes grew increasingly brown, their leaves withered and dying. Their very life force was being sucked out. The dying vegetation wasn’t the only change. Since he’d entered the forest he’d heard bugs or animals, but now heard only the quiet moaning of the wind and the crunch of branches under his feet. The one wildcard in the situation was the despair bug’s ability to get into people’s heads. From what he’d read, it only worked on people who already had issues with depression or sadness. The monster talks to James, in the guise of Father Thomas, his orphanage “father”, Thomas tries to convince him to take his own life, but James knows he’s fake, and shoots the vision. The real bug now shows itself, and James manages to knife it in the head and in its eyes, killing it.
 Connor had been watching, and admired James for killing the despair bug. Would have taken him out for a beer in other circumstances. But was perfect circumstance to take him down. Shay approached him, used a knife to his wrist, then to his throat. Got info re assassins, then slit his throat.
 ====Chapter Nineteen====

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 ====Chapter Ten====
 Brownstone finds Stevens, who begs to be forgotten, as he’s only a level-one bounty. Brownstone wants him to turn himself in, and Stevens agrees, and does so, several hours later.
-James goes to the Leanan Sídhe bar to ask the Professor for useful things to help in the fight with the assassins. Father O’Banion asks, for payment, that James participate in the Bard of Filth competition. (See Locations [[Leanan Sídhe]]). Agrees, and O’Banion promises to look for things for him. Goes to Zoe’s, gets potions for himself and Shay. Zoe tells him he’s too much surrounded by killing and death for her, just a business deal from now on.
+James goes to the Leanan Sídhe bar to ask the Professor for useful things to help in the fight with the assassins. Father O’Banion asks, for payment, that James participate in the Bard of Filth competition. (See Locations [[Leanan Sídhe]], [[Bard of Filth Competition]]). Agrees, and O’Banion promises to look for things for him. Goes to Zoe’s, gets potions for himself and Shay. Zoe tells him he’s too much surrounded by killing and death for her, just a business deal from now on.
 ====Chapter Eleven====

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 ====Chapter Ten====
 Brownstone finds Stevens, who begs to be forgotten, as he’s only a level-one bounty. Brownstone wants him to turn himself in, and Stevens agrees, and does so, several hours later.
-James goes to the Leanan Sídhe bar to ask the Professor for useful things to help in the fight with the assassins. Father O’Banion asks, for payment, that James participate in the Bard of Filth competition. (See Locations- Leanan Sídhe Bar). Agrees, and O’Banion promises to look for things for him. Goes to Zoe’s, gets potions for himself and Shay. Zoe tells him he’s too much surrounded by killing and death for her, just a business deal from now on.
+James goes to the Leanan Sídhe bar to ask the Professor for useful things to help in the fight with the assassins. Father O’Banion asks, for payment, that James participate in the Bard of Filth competition. (See Locations [[Leanan Sídhe]]). Agrees, and O’Banion promises to look for things for him. Goes to Zoe’s, gets potions for himself and Shay. Zoe tells him he’s too much surrounded by killing and death for her, just a business deal from now on.
 ====Chapter Eleven====

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 James asked Alison if she could feel comfortable and call him Dad. He asked her if he could adopt her. She cried. For the first time in a long time James could see a future, something that wasn’t just pain and violence broken by the occasional barbecue feast. A family. He’d given up on the idea long ago, thinking no one could love an ugly and cursed freak like him, but Shay and Alison had both accepted him with all his faults and sins.
-Shay had Peyton research the group, came up with the  names. These are premium top-grade assassins, not just hit men. True killers; some of the best in the business. (See Groups, Assassins) Brownstone worried about the Soul Collector.
+Shay had Peyton research the group, came up with the  names. These are premium top-grade assassins, not just hit men. True killers; some of the best in the business. (See Groups, [[Assassins, Harriken Style]]) Brownstone worried about the Soul Collector.
 ====Chapter Eight, Nine====

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-In ''Bring the Pain'' many themes are expanded, the main one, perhaps, being the development of Brownstone as a much more complex character. His KISS philosophy is gradually being undermined and dismantled, as the complexities of life encroach upon it. He and Shay and Alison interact extensively, Magic makes killing not as simple as it once was, and even his basic understanding of who he is, is in question.
+   In ''Bring the Pain'' many themes are expanded, the main one, perhaps, being the development of Brownstone as a much more complex character. His KISS philosophy is gradually being undermined and dismantled, as the complexities of life encroach upon it. He and Shay and Alison interact extensively, Magic makes killing not as simple as it once was, and even his basic understanding of who he is, is in question.
 ====Chapter One====

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 In ''Bring the Pain'' many themes are expanded, the main one, perhaps, being the development of Brownstone as a much more complex character. His KISS philosophy is gradually being undermined and dismantled, as the complexities of life encroach upon it. He and Shay and Alison interact extensively, Magic makes killing not as simple as it once was, and even his basic understanding of who he is, is in question.
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 Guess I should have figured out she’d see that.
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